WALT: show not tell
WALT: use a variety of different lengths
Her hair flew back over her shoulders as she flew over the cloudy mountains. The thick clouds of fog surrounded her as she flew over the continuous forest. She could now see dark colored water. She was slowly going down down down. Suddenly her feet were touching the water. I looked back trying to find somewhere to land but all there was, were icebergs covered with seals. I saw an iceberg that was empty so i turned my balloon over too the iceberg and landed safely.
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